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[2025 Gettysburg Address]	작성자 : 조성진
구분 : 뉴스	2025-08-28 오후 5:54:00
To summarize what President Lincoln said, all men are equal. I'll present three reasons for this. Firstly, ~~fisrt,~~ the definition of democracy. The government's role, once again, is to serve the people. (Firstly, the definition of democracy refers to the government's role to serve the people.) Secondly, ~~It isays~~ it states that all human beings are created equal and that the government is ~~justified by~~ supported by the will of the people. (Secondly, it states that all human beings are created equal, and the government is supported by the will of the people.) Thirdly, this speech is also a pledge that a government that safeguards the values of freedom and equality should continue so to ensure that those who died during the Civil War did not die in vain. (Thirdly, this speech is a pledge that a government safeguarding the values of freedom and equality should continue to ensure that those who died during the Civil War did not die in vain.) To sum up, it is to ensure that the lives of those lost are not wasted. Suggestions for Improvement: Try to avoid misspellings and proofread your text for clarity and correctness. Instead of using "so far" and "to sum up" in the beginning, it would be better to start with an introductory sentence explaining what you are going to discuss. When introducing points, use "Firstly, Secondly, and Thirdly" instead of "first, second, third" for smoother transitions. Your Score: B

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	[2025 Gettysburg Address]
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